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    • 13-03-2008
      20:21

    Hi

    Does anyone know where I can find examples of commentaries written for coursework? Basically, my teacher has left us to do it all by next week and hasn’t given us any help or layout or anything.

    Also, does anyone have a layout that they used for their commentaries?

    Thank you

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    • 13-03-2008
      20:23

    yes

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    • 14-03-2008
      21:41

    I don’t know where you could find examples of coursework commentaries – unless your English department has some relevant resources? – but I’ve just finished writing both of mine, so I’ll try to help
    I’m assuming that you’re doing AQA… otherwise I don’t know if this will be of any use to you!

    Basically the aim of the commentaries is to explain not only how you devised your coursework pieces, but why you made the choices that you did. For example, if you’ve written for a teenage audience, what specific language features did you include that reflected this? e.g. informal voice, colloquial lexis, words that mimicked speech etc.
    It’s just an extended piece of writing – an essay, really – so there’s not much to worry about with regards to layout.

    We were told to make reference to our style models throughout, comment on the effectiveness of the techniques they employed and then explore how our pieces were similar/different.

    So it’s an evaluation of your piece and its success!

    Hope this helps!

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    • 17-03-2008
      14:17

    can anyone help me? Im so bad at original writing and I need to get an A in my coursework as I am re-submitting, tips anyone?
    I dont have any idea at all what I’m writing about

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    • 18-03-2008
      12:24

    Just remember PEE;

    Point
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    Explain

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    • 12-12-2009
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    Hey Im also stuck on commentry.. iv done my c/w bowt earthquake.. like a reality story.. n i have no idea how 2do my commentry!!!! IM ALSO STUCK!!!

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    • 13-12-2009
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    The easiest way to desribe writing a commentary is to pick out all the literary techniques you have used in your work and explain why you have used them, what their desired effect is. Also you need to mention about you aim ie to entertain and how you managed to identify with your target audience. Recently finished my coursework and commentaries and I’m studying from home. Even worse!

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    • 14-12-2009
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    (Original post by melonhead12)

    The easiest way to desribe writing a commentary is to pick out all the literary techniques you have used in your work and explain why you have used them, what their desired effect is. Also you need to mention about you aim ie to entertain and how you managed to identify with your target audience. Recently finished my coursework and commentaries and I’m studying from home. Even worse!

    hey thnks 4ur help.. buh ino i gotta do that already.. jst duno hw 2 write it.. n hw 2start it 🙁
    WOW! buh i bet ur cleva.. unlike me lollz…

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    • 21-12-2009
      17:13

    I just started with something like “My main aim was to entertain my audience in the style of Angela Carter’s novel “The Bloody Chamber”. My target audience was blah blah and I achieved this by/this is evident in my story as….”

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    • 12-12-2013
      18:41

    To complement the written pieces, candidates will
    be required to produce two commentaries which will
    allow them to reflect upon the writing process. Each
    commentary should contain:
    • discussion of the style model(s) used in the
    planning process
    • discussion of any significant changes made during
    the writing process
    • reference to any reading materials used, and
    discussion of how they were adapted to suit the
    new text
    • analysis of the stylistic devices used in the text,
    with exemplification from the text
    • reflection on the effectiveness of the final piece
    including, where relevant, feedback from a variety
    of sources.
    This is what AQA wants.

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    • 18-12-2013
      21:43

    Talk about language style & type, grammar, sentence structure, how you related it to your style model, why you did what you did and didn’t do, your target audience.

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    • 04-01-2014
      15:57

    Should I include my opinion? As I’m doing a commentary on a footballer, shall I say why I chose to do so?

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    • 21-01-2015
      13:21

    banta

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    • 21-01-2015
      13:23

    ( Original post by bigjohndog69)

    big dog with the banta 69

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    • 21-01-2015
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    ya ma

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    • 21-01-2015
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    shut yo ***** ass mouth

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    • 27-04-2015
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    omg only banta!!!!!!

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    • 19-05-2015
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    *Banter

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    • 18-10-2015
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    English Language-‘The War on Emo’ commentary ‘The War on Emo’ piece was written for an audience of teenagers, most likely between the ages of 15-19, and was a direct response to an article featured in the Daily Mail about the ‘dangers’ of emo. The author of this particular article wrote about the recent resurgence in the ’emo’ movement and the dangers it poses to teenagers, particularly young, teenage girls. Style models such as articles from the music magazine ‘the NME,’ and the newspaper ‘The Guardian’ were used. There were various notable features used in each of these style models which I have tried to emulate in my piece, for instance the use of subtle humour and obviously persuasive techniques. The purpose of the text was primarily to persuade, yet the secondary purpose was intended to argue. I aimed for my text to be of a suitable style in order to be published in a music magazine such as Kerrang! …read more.

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    Therefore in my final draft, the opening paragraph is a definition of the word emo, which was originally the second paragraph. This change means that the audience are given a rough outline of what the rest of the article will be based on, and also gives them a little background knowledge. Given that my target audience are teenagers, it seemed more appropriate to make my article quite informal, almost chatty, in order to appeal to them. After reading my first draft, my language appeared to use a fairly formal register, probably more suited to an audience of adults. Therefore, I decided to change the register used to more informal, yet still using Standard-English and spelling. Words like "personally" and "in conclusion" were changed to "for me" and "so" respectively. A common feature of persuasive writing is to use emotive language, something that was lacking in my first draft. …read more.

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    Sands, something that I have been attempting to do throughout. After reading over my first and second drafts, I noticed that there was a shortage of rhetorical questions and other persuasive techniques such as lists of three. I opted to add a few more rhetorical questions such as "however, where is the evidence to suggest that every single one of those teens wore band t-shirts and skinny black jeans?" This technique forces the reader to think about what I am saying, and coming to the conclusion that it is unreasonable to assume that all emos self-harm. I also added more lists of three because they help to strengthen my point by the use of repetition of a particular idea. "She tells me she is happy, has never even considered self-harming and her ’emo’ dress sense seems to be more linked to fashion than depression," is a list of three that highlights the inconsistencies in Sands article, and ultimately persuades the reader to dismiss her article as absurd. …read more.

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